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Agony and Rapture Chapter 7

  • Nov. 13th, 2007 at 8:18 PM
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Title: Agony and Rapture
Rating: PG-13
Summary: When Doumeki starts tutoring a girl for math, he ends up spending more time with her, and less with Watanuki. Watanuki is NOT jealous. Really!
Disclaimer: Characters belong to clamp!
A/N: WARNING: The angst level may have decreased drastically in the previous chapter, but that does not mean that it is over! Watanuki still needs to figure out why Doumeki was upset with him. Doumeki is not as mad as he was in the begining, and though it may be hard to tell, he's missing Watanuki just as much as Watanuki is missing him. I'm sorry you can't get in his head in this one, but I decided to play the more challenging character. (Yes, I am much better with Doumeki.. Oddly enough)... Beta'd by the wonderful lehst, I love you so much!



The students around me stood up as the bell rang, all bowing in unision before packing up to go.

Himawari had told me earlier that she would be busy with club activities, so I was going to walk to Yuuko's shop on my own. I didn't want to be on my own.

My legs were walking, as if of their own accord, like the day I had first stumbled into Yuuko's shop two years ago.

I walked and walked until I reached the archery range, sitting near a large group of Doumeki fan girls. The most annoying group ever.

I sighed, why did they have to be here watching the kyuudo club practice? Even worse, what would they think if they saw me here? What was worse was, I didn't think it really mattered, I was just here to get the bento box so I could bring it back with me to Yuuko's. There was no other reason for me to be here.

I'm sure I had started to blush around then, because getting the bento box really wasn't the only reason that I was sitting here, waiting like an idiot. I wanted to see Doumeki.

He was on the line right now, bow aimed, string pulled back. He released; the arrow soared through the air, hitting dead center on the target.

He knocked another arrow, momentarily glancing at the crowd of watching fangirls, and he looked right at me. When he shot the bow this time.. It still hit the Bull's Eye but was very far to the side. He was distracted, by me?

I could hear the coach scolding him, telling him not to look away from the target. Doumeki only shrugged it off, saying nothing. The way he always did.

I shifted behind the crowd of girls a bit, hoping that he would not look back again, and if he did, he wouldn't see me there. But he already knew that I was there.

An hour later practice was finally over. I waited outside; he would be back out after he changed anyway, right?

Yuuko was going to kill me.

I saw Doumeki talking to another guy from kyuudo club not long later, so I waited where I was anyway. Would he come to me, or would I have to go to him? I didn't want to bother him while he was in the middle of a conversation, did I? It couldn't be much of a conversation anyway, this was Doumeki after all.

When I looked back, they were gone.

I stood up and looked around, no one was in sight.

I sighed and turned around to go to work, and my doom. Yuuko was going to be mad.

I turned around to look back again when I was halfway to the school gate, hoping to see Doumeki following, but nothing.

With yet another heavy sigh, I began walking again, only to bump into something large and solid, I fell back, but was pulled up by a strong hand.

"D- Doumeki," I stuttered, looking away from his face, my eyes fixed on the ground next to my left foot.

He handed me the empty bento box, and I looked up once more. As usual, his face was just as stoic as ever. I never knew what he was thinking. Why? Why did he have to be like this?

"H..How was it?" I finally managed to ask after a few moments of silence.

"Less soy sauce next time," was his quick, monotonous reply. Jerk.

"WHAT THE HELL! I was being nice making you that! The least you could do is say 'thank you' you big dumb jerk! You should be saying 'Thank you Watanuki-sama' and bow before me!"

"Idiot."

I stopped talking then as he let go of my arm and began to walk off again. Doumeki. I was the one pushing him away, right? And I knew I didn't want to watch him walk away again.

"Doumeki," I said, and he stopped again, not turning around.

I couldn't speak, but there he was in front of me, I staring at his back. The minute dragged on far longer then it should be able to. I hated it. I lunged foreward, putting my arms around him, and... he just stood there. He didn't even turn around to return my hug, he didn't say anything. He just let it happen.

"Doumeki..."

"Hn?"

"Why- why are you ignoring me?"

"You haven't learned anything, have you?"

I was shivering, but... It wasn't really cold out, was it?

I let go of Doumeki, taking a step back. My heart hurt, and it was getting harder to hold back tears again. I needed him, and why couldn't I say that? Why couldn't I tell him?

"WATANUKI! DON'T DISAPPEAR!"

A hand reached out of the darkness, grabbing at me. What the hell? Wasn't I just standing in the school yard with Doumeki?

But now there was darkness all around me, and then a man in a hakama that looked suspiciously like the boy I was talking to.

"Haruka-san!"

I was in a dream again. I must have passed out. But why did I have to pass out now?

"Watanuki, you need to wake up!"

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Comments

[info]kurorinslvr wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 02:31 am (UTC)
oh wow that was twist. Nice chapter
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 02:34 am (UTC)
lol, thanks!
[info]kurorinslvr wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 02:35 am (UTC)
i forgot to say, i was upset when Doumeki didn't come to him, but... i don't know it is like i want watanuki to understand his mistake, but i don't want him to suffer, but that's the only way, because he is stubborn. Looking forward for the next chapter.
But the way. This is my favorite line/part
"I lunged foreward, putting my arms around him, and... he just stood there. He didn't even turn around to return my hug, he didn't say anything. He just let it happen.

"Doumeki..."

"Hn?"

"Why- why are you ignoring me?"
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 02:39 am (UTC)
That's my favorite part too.. XD..
[info]sillyangelfaery wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 02:46 am (UTC)
GAH NO WATA-CHAN DON'T DIEEEE!

Oh. Sorry. Hysteria. You know how it goes.

Um. Don't disappear? :D ♥?

THIS IS VERY GOOD. I LOVE IT AND YOU. WOOT!
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 02:51 am (UTC)
lol. Thanks!
[info]lonewolfe001 wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 05:08 am (UTC)
Good chapter, I liked the twist at the end.
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:06 pm (UTC)
haha. Everyone seems to... I'm working on the next part now!
[info]batty_angel wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 08:27 am (UTC)
oooh! I wonder what will happen next...
Thank you for another awesome chapter ^_^
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:06 pm (UTC)
You're welcome! ^^
[info]black_feenix wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 08:40 am (UTC)
Nice cliffhanger! You cruel cruel person.
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:07 pm (UTC)
I'm a sadist.. What can I say?
[info]black_feenix wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:36 pm (UTC)
Argh! -whines- You're so meeeeeeean!
I do love a good cliffhanger......I just hate it when I can't get to the next bit!!!
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:43 pm (UTC)
I'm writing the next chapter right now. It will be up either later tonight or tomorrow.
[info]black_feenix wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 02:30 pm (UTC)
Yay!!! So it should be ready when I wake up, huh? XD
It should be good to see what Haruka says.
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 04:01 pm (UTC)
lol, yeah.
[info]renki_chan wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 08:58 am (UTC)
Nice chapter^^ So Watanuki is the dream world...I think Haruka-san is gonna teach him something^^ *waits for the next chapter*
[info]renki_chan wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:03 pm (UTC)
Ah I almost forgot... I did draw Watanuki hugging the panda..Do you mind if I post the pic?
I will write that I have been ispired by your fic ^^
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:04 pm (UTC)
I would LOVE to see the pic! Please do post!
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:08 pm (UTC)
Thanks.. lol. And we can only hope!
[info]sarahxchan wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 12:43 pm (UTC)
jkfjdklfj! Ahh, I feel like at the last line something in my head went, "DUN DUN DUNNNNN". :[ I'm so confused about why Doumeki is avoiding him....@___@ Like always, thanks for this awesome chapter.
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 01:09 pm (UTC)
It was explained in one of the comments in chapter 5 I believe.. I wasn't revealing anything just to see what the readers would say, and someone hit it right one the nose, so go take a look! lol.

Thanks! ^^
[info]daydreamer64 wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 09:20 pm (UTC)
*Is dead* Shall resuscitate when next chapter comes out.
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 09:33 pm (UTC)
XD.. Oh noes!! A Phoenix Down won't help?
[info]daydreamer64 wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 10:00 pm (UTC)
nope *still dead*
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 10:36 pm (UTC)
Well.. I can't kiss you... Watanuki wouldn't like that.
[info]daydreamer64 wrote:
Nov. 15th, 2007 08:49 pm (UTC)
XD! Of course I wouldn't dream of it!But don't worry! I'm still alive! especially after what happened today! XD I am such a dork I swear I got so happy cuz I saw my guy before my last class and he hugged me! *twirls in happines* He hugged me again! He would've hugged me during homeroom but I was too much of a dolt and ran for it. >.< I gotta stop running from him-I guess it's become a habit. XD.

Btw... you promised a new chappie would be done by the time I finished my school work. *looks around wildly* Did I miss it?
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 15th, 2007 09:41 pm (UTC)
No.. Um.. I haven't talked to my editor yet.. (which means I haven't writen it) She's gonna be mad...
[info]daydreamer64 wrote:
Nov. 15th, 2007 10:05 pm (UTC)
Blink *dead once more at least till next chappie comes out*
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 15th, 2007 11:05 pm (UTC)
Oh noes! I'll get it done soon! I promise!
[info]piph_chan wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 09:58 pm (UTC)
oooh nice twist in the end - I LOVE Haruka san. <333

[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 14th, 2007 10:39 pm (UTC)
lol, thanks!
[info]konrankoneko wrote:
Nov. 15th, 2007 01:40 am (UTC)
Hello, I just read through your story and have to say this is awesome! This story is gripping! It draws you in.
[info]deathbyalice wrote:
Nov. 15th, 2007 01:45 am (UTC)
Thanks so much!